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Post by Harkovast on Feb 18, 2015 20:33:15 GMT
I'm going over chapter one and editing it to read a bit better at the minute. It's quite fun so far. Lots of cool fighting. I still can't believe people really thought they were supposed to side with Vox over loveable Porgro!
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Post by Harkovast on Feb 18, 2015 20:56:16 GMT
I'm editing a bit to make Meckenzie and Garix's motivations clearer. They started to make a wrong assumption that there was some third faction, rather than that their own faction is totally evil, so I made Meckenzie figure it out better to clear up the narrative. I am Dr Retcon.
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Post by Horsie on Feb 18, 2015 20:59:00 GMT
Now we've got three levels of editing; Canuovea to piece it together, me to find lingering errors, and you to polish it.
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Post by Harkovast on Feb 18, 2015 21:35:20 GMT
Its a lot of fun actually, but its also a lot of work. It takes ages to read through it all and make changes.
Its satisfying but its still a lot of effort.
Uh oh...I just realised that was the shortest chapter! It's only going to get tougher.
I was thinking...for the final battle in the last chapter, we should write in Meckenzie and Garix coming to help. It seems weird that those two weren't involved. They could have helped Sir Alard doing the distraction.
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Post by Harkovast on Feb 18, 2015 22:04:38 GMT
Mad props to Canuovea and Renard for all their work so far. It really takes a lot of effort to sort all this stuff out.
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Post by Horsie on Feb 18, 2015 22:09:15 GMT
It was mostly Canuovea.
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Post by Harkovast on Feb 19, 2015 0:25:13 GMT
There's a reason he's the ultimate fan.
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Post by Harkovast on Feb 19, 2015 1:09:31 GMT
Senchos is really cool.
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Post by zaealix on Feb 19, 2015 2:39:53 GMT
Senchos cool? What cool thing did he do besides typical political sleazebag maneuverings and blame-shifting? Well, first thing first, that guy WAS the governor fellow of the Golta Fort right?
I thought Pin Point was the guy Konrad Shot, Vinooch was the nice Golta, and Senchos the sleazy Governor.
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Post by Canuovea on Feb 19, 2015 6:30:48 GMT
Hendrick is the sleazy governor, and Senchos is the Eslum fellow who had that ship and helped out with freeing the slaves. You got the rest right, though!
I'm going to be busy with all my practicum stuff so I'll probably not be able to work too much on Chapter 4. But I'll see what I can do when I have some free time later in March.
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Post by Harkovast on Feb 19, 2015 13:38:08 GMT
Hendrick is also cool...but cool in a bad way because he is so irredeemably awful. Though in his defence, he does has a consistent moral frame work...its just a monstrously evil one.
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Post by Harkovast on Apr 4, 2015 0:23:22 GMT
Chapter 2 has been edited! I'm cooking with gas now!
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Post by Horsie on Apr 4, 2015 0:30:49 GMT
We'll have to rework a lot of Chapter 4.
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Post by Harkovast on Apr 4, 2015 1:11:29 GMT
Yeah everyone seems to be dreading chapter 4.
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Post by Canuovea on Apr 4, 2015 3:15:50 GMT
I started on four.
To be honest though, the longer page sections will make it easier. And it is already in scenes... and characters split up a bit. So that might help once we get past the beginning where everyone is talking at once about different things. It is like they're holding separate conversations at the same time.
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